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[Inside the dojo] Rio-sensei: Alright everyone get into sparing pairs now. [All kids get into groups of two except a young Gin and a girl with medium long crimson hair] Gin, Maya, you two team up.

Gin and Maya [disappointed]: Aww man I gotta team up with him/her!

Rio-sensei: Now now children, no need to get upset. So tell me what exactly is the problem her?

Gin: Maya cheats sensei! She always trips people.

Maya: That’s a load, sensei don’t trust that irritable little klutz bastard. He’s constantly making excuses.

Gin: Klu.. Klu.. KLUTZ BASTARD!! The Hells a klutz bastard?

Maya: You’re a klutz bastard, and a klutz bastard is you. Got that kohai?

Gin: Ko? Hai? I’m five years older than you!

Maya: Five years older, and five inches shorter. Eh.. Chibi-chan.

Gin: That’s it witch! You and me in the ring RIGHT NOW!

Maya: Fine. Bring it Chibi-chan.

Rio-sensei: Gin! Geki Ken Ryu is not meant to be used for revenge, nor competition. Especially against nakama.

Gin: NAKAMA!? THE HELL ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT SENSEI!? Why the hell would I be nakama with a flat chested bitch like her?

Maya: What.. Did… Say?…… You little SHRIMP!!

Random Girl: No Maya, you shouldn’t.

Maya: LET ME AT ‘EM!LET ME AT ‘EM!! Urgh! It’s fine Sensei, I’ll take him. In fact I believe this will be over in just 52 seconds.

Gin: Alright ya flat chested bitch pick up the sword. This time I won’t let you cheat your way to win! Hmmm.

Maya [whispers]: I’m gonna make you eat those words.. You BITCH!!

Gin/Maya [yelling]: YeAhhH!!!

GinMaya [In the fight]: Various shouts, heavy breathing, and the sound of wooden swords clashing.

Maya [Slips]: Woah!

Gin: Now’s my chance. HeYaaaa. [Runs as fast as possible lifting his sword. He stops and taps Maya gently on the head with his sword] Yessssss! I finally won! I finally Won! [sob]

[Maya walks up to Gin and taps him on the shoulder, he turns around]

Maya: [Presents her hand to Gin] (Blushes): G… Goo. God job>

Gin [Smiles and high fives Maya]: Hmm thanks. [Looks at her chest] (whispers) There’s still nothing there.

[Maya smacks him in the back of the head]

Gin: Oww!!

[The 2 smile at each other and laugh]

End


A re:edit of ABSN chapter one. Turned into a stand alone story has nothing to do with the original.

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Amusing and cute...... much too much swearing for my taste.

2007-09-01 23:46:04


It turned out pretty good. The ending is funny and cute- well done!

2007-08-29 11:06:30


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