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ADDED: 04.02.2008
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POEM BY SUISUKE:
RIGHT NOW IM IN DRIVERS ED AND TODAY THE TEACHER HAD FOUR PICS ON THE TV. THE 1ST ONE WAS OF A TEENAGE BOY ON A RESPIRATER(CANT SPELL IT) CAUSE HE COULD NOT BREATHE ON HIS OWN. THE 2ND WAS OF AN EMPTY JAIL CELL, THE 3RD WAS OF A FUNERAL WITH MANY TEENAGERS GATHERD, AND THE LAST ONE WAS A SMALL CHILD PROBABLY 3 OR 4 CRYING. THE TEACHER TOLD US TO WRITE A STORY... I WROTE A POEM... THIS IS WHAT I WROTE:
Hate me and beat me physically instead
Of the emotional abuse you put in my head
Were the words he put down on the paper
That he thought he’d give to them later
Put down the pen and picked up the beer off the table
Leaning against the wall to keep himself stable
He went and hopped into the car
Because he didn’t have to go far.
In and empty jail cell there is a bed
Where someone will lay down their head
All these things that could have been stopped
Now for them many tears have been dropped
A young boy lays hooked to machines
Never to fulfill his hopes and dreams
While his best friend is laid in the ground
As their classmates smiles become a frown.
Alcohol and hallucinogens were the game
Now they hang their head in shame
A small child cries for the loss of her father
While a mother mourns the death of her daughter
Two parents wait for the outcome of their son
As everyone wonders why this was done.
i must say..you are a very passionate person ^_^ i am a fan of your work
nice.
Hey, sorry took so long to read your works, my friend. I had been hospitalized. Anyway, great work as usual. Keep it up! ^_^
WHAT THE f*** WAS THAT, IT WAS WIERD, but cool at the same time. LOL
it is amazing!!!!!!!!!! If your teacher didn't give you a good grade i beat some common sense into him XD XD
*sigh* so true...
kyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!..love it!..it is so well done...i think your teacher should give you an A+++++++++++++++++++!
.......wow.....you did a really good job and just about made me 2 were i couldnt think! good job!
I read this earlier but forgot to leave a comment! So sorry *bows* This was indeed a difficult subject to write on but I think you were able to bring a sorrowful and thought provoking poem to life.
its beautiful
It's nice....and sorrowful. You have beautiful words!
Good work on a difficult subject. Well done by all measures!
cool awsome
wow
TAYTAY
06.06.2008 03:22 PM