if you did this yourself, you are very,very talented.... you should keep at it...

REBELVAMP

2008-08-14 21:05:32

oh, also, that last sentence "but that day's not here yet." i thought it might sound better to shorten it. For greater impact, usually very short sentences are the best, also because people can easily memorize them word for word and it sticks in the mind. "Someday I expect it will destroy me. But not yet, not while i still have breath." or "Someday i expect it will destroy me. But not today." Aaaanyways, thats just a minor change, and its my preference. Hmmmm. I guess the main reason i like this piece is because its something i can imagine happening in a movie. Your frames are placed as such. Good directing skills, poor drawing skills. (sry to say that) But nobody does good the first times. If you go take some of those more difficult college art classes you sometimes get assignments like "draw some couple thousand circles by the end of the week and turn them in on friday, use as many papers as you like." and the professor will look through your papers and if the circles are in general, to sloppy, you'll just fail the assignment. Most classes aren't that old fashioned but it shows how repetition does wonders. to draw well it just takes practice. Talent is like the b factor in the y=mx+b equation, while practice is the slope, lol. Keeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep at it!

LEADANDIRON

2007-04-30 16:55:00

Work on your art, and keep practicing drawing faces and proportions and folds in the clothing, and you will be a master at drawing manga, i guarantee it, because your editing skills are great. You place the frames well with dramatic effect and i love the top view of the girl as she spins to shoot that zombie thing. Oh and one more thing, you should make her surrounded by zombies in the beginning, to show that the zombie didnt just like appear out of nowhere and people dont go like wtf man. I love your style, keep up the good work, keep drawing manga and you'll get better at it!

LEADANDIRON

2007-04-25 21:46:17