The reason I'm not putting my stories here on Tokyopop is, because I keep getting timed out.

They're on my Deviantart account, http://pearlshatz.deviantart.com. The link I typed will bring you to my account. I go by the name pearlshatz there.

My stories are titled 'Waterlogged' and 'Mea Lanakila Kahua.' Both stories revolve around sports. I'd like some honest critiques on both of them.

Waterlogged and Mea Lanakila Kahua are the property of Jennifer Lafferty. AKA, Verdekurama and Pearlshatz. No parts of these stories or their characters cannot be used without my permission.